Hey, what are you doing? Put that down. You gonna hurt yourself. No, no, I said to the left. That boy's about as sharp as a bowling ball. Hey, pull my finger. Go clean your room. Go do your homework. Do it and die boy. She doesn't hate you, she just views you as a lower life form. Wow, that looked like it really hurt. You might want to stand back a bit. Did you hear that? That's a riot! Hey, how was school? Go take that mangy dog out! Yeah, whatever. Get down here! You are totally your moms son! Where's that brother of yours? What did she say?
This is good. I can see the imagery in it while reading it because of your word choice. I'm not sure if I see a plot twist at the end though? Maybe it's just confusing for me.
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